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"Sick sky
Get well

Cover up
Tightly

You're my
Summer
In this
Winter

Warm me with life

I cant see with my eyes
So you make me feel it
Up and down my little spin
And around my hips
Around, around

Somewhere in the blue forest
You planted seeds
They're going to grow
Somewhere in the blue forest
I cant give up now
They're going to grow

Empty room
Flood with
Transient
Sun light


This is all I need
Just a little longer
And I'll be able to feel
You standing next to me
Next to, Next to me

Sick sky
Get well
I can't see
If there's no light

Sick sky
Get well"

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:iconmitatos:
im spring :) lol

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The Point of Beeing YOU its TO be YOURSELF.
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:iconneonlights:
Fan, freakin-tastic.

It says advanced critique encouraged, so:

I think the words still take away from the image as a whole a little, design-wise. I think its because they feel pasted over the top. Maybe if you were to integrate them somehow, like by putting them behind the flower and the hand a little. That might just be my own personal taste though.

This is amazing, man. Chao!

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:iconbigjimmyc:
Thank you! I wasn't too hot on the text myself. The version I put on my myspace front page was without them but I thought it needed something else. I wanted to make it a little more on the commercial art side (graphic design side?).

I think I'll try doing what you suggested or just make the text more plain and part of the border and less as part of the piece.

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Only my body is proof, If I swallow down the night, that’s my climax
:iconbatikha:
together .. midnight in summer

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and let the magic begins ...
:iconvonderv:
You've said yourself. It is painful, but it is also delightful ;) (never say never my friend!)

This is so different to what you showed before, but it remains as touching as it was before.

At first sight, I felt there was something about the heart behind the text (on the lower right corner) that didn't fit... now that I have a closer look, that thing went away.

Seamless! :clap:

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"I like your Christ. I do not like your christians. Christians are so unlike your Christ."
- M. Gandhi
:iconbetsytheripper:
"That's so modernist of you." <3

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fa mi ly
fishie <><
:iconscott67:
Awww. That's such a beautiful way to put it. It sort of reminds me of the movie "Harold and Maude". One of my favorite love stories. Maude's favorite flower was the sun flower. :sun: :flowerpot:
:iconherrtwiggs:
that's very cute. but the arm in the box scares me.

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I ♥ katamari
:iconbigjimmyc:
Omg, my friend told me about that movie. Hahaha! <3

Sunflowers remind me of my first boyfriend, because we passed a field of dead sunflowers.

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Only my body is proof, If I swallow down the night, that’s my climax
:iconbigjimmyc:
The box reminds me of an acid trip. I was going to go for a plain box but my friend said the red/purple box fit because of the red heart. I don't know. I'm always willing to retake with a plain box.

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Only my body is proof, If I swallow down the night, that’s my climax

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